第五段
转折/主题句："I quickly learned that this small town was far more conservative than my university's eastern college community."
论点和证据：她根据自己对当地右翼活动分子的研究发表了文章和专栏评论，对反对她的做法的观点进行反击。
第六段
转折/主题句："When my State Senator asked me to manage his reelection campaign, I eagerly accepted since I knew he had worked hard in support of health care and civil rights."
论点和证据：她从创作有效的政治宣传文件，管理志愿者等工作得到宝贵的教训。
第七段
转折/主题句："I had hoped to work in the state capitol after the campaign, and I am now working for a state level health care advocacy organization which employs a lobbyist and coordinates grassroots strategy."
论点和证据：她通过研究法律法规、协助负责人等工作，在自己目前的职位上，继续专注于保健和政治。
第八段（结论）
转折/主题句："While I believe that I have developed both academic and professional expertise in reproductive health policy, health care reform, and political organizing, I would like to acquire the skills and power to make a bigger difference."
结束语：作者重申文章要点，并且和上法学院的动机以及毕业后的目标紧紧联系起来。
例1：Activist
注意：为了教学目的，该文发表时未加修改。
While I was a student, I gained professional experience as a birth control counselor at the University health clinic. I also worked as a Planned Parenthood educator, for which I edited a sexuality education curriculum and designed and taught community programs on contraception, AIDS, puberty, and sexual abuse prevention.